Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The consumption of china in 2014 is 5,322 billion kwh and production was 5,398 billion kwh. America is top 2 in production and consumption of electricity in 2014 the production was 4,099 billion kwh and consumption is less 3,866 billion kwh. Top 3 country is Russia with consumption of 1,038 billion kwh and 1,057 billion kwh production in 2014. Japan and India have similar consumption and production rate but little difference, japan have production of 936.2 billion kwh and consumption of 856.7 billion kwh, on the other hand 871 production of India and 698.8 consumption. Moving ahead to Canada, France, and Brazil

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant figures accurately, including China, the United States, Russia, Japan and India. However, the response is incomplete: it stops after introducing Canada, France and Brazil, without reporting their figures or covering Germany and South Korea. It also lacks a clear overview of the main pattern, such as China and the United States producing and consuming far more electricity than the other countries. The response contains 106 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail and coverage possible. To improve, add a concise overview and compare the remaining countries, selecting the most notable similarities and differences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The information follows a broadly understandable sequence, moving from the leading countries to Japan and India, and phrases such as “on the other hand” show an attempt to connect comparisons. However, the response is presented as one paragraph and has no distinct overview, so the reader does not get a clear summary before the details. The final phrase, “Moving ahead to Canada, France, and Brazil,” is unfinished and leaves the progression abruptly incomplete. Some links are also used mechanically rather than to develop a complete comparison. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview and detail paragraphs, and ensure each paragraph contains complete, logically connected information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the basic subject, including “production,” “consumption,” “bar graph” and “billion kwh.” The repeated use of “production” and “consumption,” however, makes the description sound limited, and several expressions are not natural for chart reporting, such as “top 2 in production” and “similar consumption and production rate.” Country names and unit formatting also need consistent presentation. A wider set of accurate comparison phrases would make the report more precise and less repetitive. For example, describe countries as “ranked second,” say that output “exceeded” consumption, and refer to “levels” or “figures” rather than a “rate” when reporting these totals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes mostly simple statements and attempts some longer comparisons, but control is uneven. For example, “America is top 2 in production and consumption … the production was … and consumption is less” joins several ideas without a clear sentence structure, while “Japan have production” has subject–verb disagreement. Tense and article use are also inconsistent in phrases such as “The consumption of china … is” and “the production was.” These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding most figures, but they reduce accuracy and make some comparisons awkward. Practise complete sentences with consistent past-tense reporting, correct agreement, and clear punctuation; then add a few controlled complex sentences to compare the two measures.

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