Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illusrates how electricity produced and consumed in top ten countries for the year 2014.

Overall, China produced and consumed the most amout of electricity. In contrast, Korea contributed least in production and consumption for the year.

Electricity produced and comsumed in China was accounted 5398 and 5322, ranked the most significant country in the word. United states production and consumption of electricity was numbered 4099 and 3866 and this country ranked in top 2. While Russia ranked 3 though it's production and consumption was more than 4000 less compared to the China and United States.

Japan, India and Canada's production and consumption of electricity was ranked them as 4,5,6 while the 7th,8th, 9th and 10th possition country were France, Brazil, Germany and Korea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s main extremes accurately: China has the highest production and consumption, while Korea has the lowest production and consumption. You also report the correct figures for China and the United States. However, the response covers the data only partially. The statement that Russia’s figures were “more than 4000 less” than those of China and the United States is unclear and inaccurate as a comparison: Russia’s values are around 1,000, and the gap from China is over 4,000, but the gap from the US is about 3,000. Most other countries are only listed by rank, with no figures or meaningful comparisons; Germany’s consumption, which exceeds its production, is also missed. The response is 126 words, below the 150-word minimum. Develop the key comparisons and include this notable exception.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of supporting information. The overview gives the reader a useful starting point, and the country rankings are presented in a broadly logical order. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph mainly lists countries rather than grouping or comparing their figures. The transition “While Russia ranked 3” does not connect smoothly to the preceding comparison, and the sentence that follows is difficult to interpret. Use clearer links to show contrasts and groupings—for example, distinguish the two leading countries from the much lower figures for the remaining countries. A separate comparison of Germany would also help the final paragraph feel complete rather than ending with a bare ranking list.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “produced,” “consumed,” “ranked,” and “in contrast,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report awkward. For example, “contributed least in production” is not a natural way to describe the lowest figure, and “was accounted” does not express the data relationship correctly. There are also spelling errors, including “illusrates,” “amout,” “comsumed,” “word,” and “possition.” Aim for precise reporting language and check spelling carefully. Phrases such as “generated the least electricity” and “stood at” would make comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrastive opening “While Russia ranked 3…”. However, errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. In “Electricity produced and comsumed in China was accounted 5398 and 5322,” the passive construction is not formed correctly; a clearer structure would be “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh.” The sentence about Japan, India and Canada also has a faulty structure: “production and consumption … was ranked them as” mixes incompatible patterns. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and prefer direct subject–verb constructions when reporting figures. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to follow.

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