Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the top countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, largest electricity produced by china and also largest electricity consumption by china. Least electricity produced and consumed by Korea.

To begin with, 5,398 billion kilowatt electricity produced by China and 5,322 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by china which makes it largest electricity producer and consumer. 4,099 billion kilowatt electricity produced by United States and 3,866 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by United States. Moreover, 1,057 billion kilowatt energy produced by Russia and 1,038 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by Russia. 936.2 billion kilowatt electricity produced by Japan and 856.7 billion kilowatt consumed by Japan. In addition, 871 billion kilowatt electricity produced by India and 698.8 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by India.

Furthermore, 618.9 billion kilowatt electricity produced by Canada in 2014 and 499.9 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by Canada. 561.2 billion kilowatt electricity produced by France and 462.9 billion electricity consumed by France in 2014. 530.7 billion kilowatt electricity produced by Brazil and 455.8 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by Brazil in 2014. In addition, 526.6 billion kilowatt electricity produced by Germany and 582.5 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by Germany. 485.1 billion kilowatt electricity produced by Korea and 449.5 billion kilowatt electricity consumed by Korea in 2014. However, least amount of electricity produced and consumed by Korea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both production and consumption for all ten countries, and the figures reported are generally accurate. The overview correctly identifies China as the largest producer and consumer, and Korea as the lowest in both categories. However, the response is largely a country-by-country list, so the main comparisons are not developed beyond the extremes. A notable feature worth highlighting is that production exceeds consumption in almost every country, while Germany is the exception; its consumption (582.5) is higher than its production (526.6). The overview also says Korea has the least electricity produced and consumed, but does not clarify that this refers to the countries shown. Select a few key comparisons and explain these patterns to make the summary more analytical.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs presenting the figures. The sequence from the largest countries to the smaller ones is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “In addition” help signal progression. However, the body paragraphs largely repeat the same sentence pattern, making the cohesion mechanical rather than flexible. The final sentence repeats the overview’s point about Korea without adding a new comparison. Grouping countries by scale or by whether production is above or below consumption would create clearer relationships between the data. Use fewer formulaic transitions and connect comparisons directly, for example by contrasting Germany with the other countries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “production,” “consumption,” “produced,” and “consumed,” and the meaning of the data is generally clear. However, the vocabulary range is limited, with repeated use of “electricity produced” and “electricity consumed” in nearly every sentence. Some collocations are inaccurate or incomplete: “largest electricity produced” and “least electricity produced” are not natural ways to describe the figures, and “billion kilowatt electricity” omits the appropriate unit expression. Vary your reporting language with phrases such as “generated,” “used,” “output,” and “consumption,” while keeping the units precise as “billion kilowatt-hours.” This would make the account more natural and concise without changing the factual content.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response communicates the figures through mostly simple sentence patterns, and the repeated structure makes the information understandable. There are some grammatical errors, particularly in the overview: “Overall, largest electricity produced by china” lacks an article and a finite verb, while “Least electricity produced and consumed by Korea” is also an incomplete sentence. The phrase “which makes it largest electricity producer and consumer” needs an article before “largest.” Capitalisation is inconsistent for “China,” and several clauses omit “was” or “were,” as in “5,398 billion kilowatt electricity produced by China.” Practise complete comparative sentences, such as “China produced 5,398 billion kilowatt-hours,” and combine related figures with accurate clauses to show a wider range of structures.

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