Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart compares top selected nations for generation and usage of electricity in 2014. china is the top by generating and using the electricity by production is 5398 while consumption is 5322,furthermore united states is almost equal to china by generating significantly increasing the electricity is 4,099 and usage is less of 3,866.furthermore the russia has sharpest growth of production 1,057 while usage is 1,038.

on the other hand, Korea has less by production and consumption of electricity. however the number of generating is 485 while using 449.Germany was created little electricity of 526 and used 582.

japan was well developed of 936 and use much of electricity of 856.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant figures, including China’s production and consumption and the United States’ values. However, the response gives only a narrow selection of countries and does not provide a clear overview of the main pattern, such as China and the US being far ahead of the other nations. Some descriptions are inaccurate or unclear: the US is not “almost equal to China” in output, and Russia does not show “growth” because the chart compares production with consumption, not change over time. Germany’s consumption exceeds its production, a useful contrast, but this is not integrated into a fuller summary. The response is also 40 words below the required minimum. Cover the main comparisons more systematically and distinguish the two measures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic grouping: the opening introduces the chart, and later sentences mention Korea, Germany and Japan. Linking expressions such as “furthermore” and “on the other hand” show an attempt to connect points. However, the information does not progress in a clear overall order, and the repeated “furthermore” does not always express a meaningful relationship. The paragraph breaks and spacing also do not create a clear structure, while the response moves between countries without explaining why those comparisons belong together. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview of the largest and smallest figures, and focused detail paragraphs—for example, China and the US first, followed by the remaining countries. Use linking words only when their relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “generation,” “usage,” “production,” “consumption” and “electricity,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited, and several word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “top by generating,” “sharpest growth” and “was created little electricity.” These choices can make the intended comparison difficult to follow. “Usage” is understandable, but “consumption” is more suitable for a formal chart report; likewise, describe figures as higher or lower rather than as growth when no time trend is shown. Build a small set of accurate comparison phrases, such as “produced more than it consumed” and “ranked among the lowest,” and use them consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine information in longer sentences, for example by joining production and consumption figures with “while,” and the basic meaning of several comparisons can be recovered. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors in sentence boundaries, articles, verb forms and punctuation occur frequently. The opening detail sentence runs together several clauses, while “Germany was created little electricity” and “Japan was well developed of 936” do not form accurate grammatical descriptions. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “china.” Use complete, controlled sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles and verb forms. For example: “China produced 5,398 billion kWh and consumed 5,322 billion kWh.”

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