Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates, the top ten nations in the development and consumption of electricity in the year 2014. Units are measured in billion kwh. Overall, the China and the America were ranked highest in both the production and use of electricity. In contrast , the Korea and the Germany were the two nations which used and consumed least amount of electricity over the shown period of time .

The China produced the highest amount of electricity which accounted for 5,398 billion kwh and the consumption was 5,322 billion kwh. Whereas, the America came as the second most popular country in the production and to utilize the electricity among all other nations on the graph the with the figures 4,099 and 3866 respectively. Moreover, The Russia and the Japan experienced downward trend .production plus consumption in Russia was almost similar with the difference of only 19%. in contrast the Japan produced 936.2 billion kwh and consume 856.7 billion kwh electricity.

In contrast,Brazil, the Germany ,the Korea ranked as the least productive countries along with least number of residents use electricity in these nations . The figures decreased from 530.7 billion kwh to 485.1 billion kwh in terms of production respectively .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart, such as the highest and lowest producers and consumers. You provided specific data points to support your descriptions, which is essential for Task 1. However, the analysis is slightly hampered by inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as the claim that Russia and Japan experienced a 'downward trend'—a bar chart for a single year cannot show a trend over time. Additionally, the comparison of Russia's production and consumption is confusingly phrased. To reach a higher band, ensure that your comparisons are mathematically accurate and avoid describing static data as a temporal trend.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a clear overview. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast', 'Whereas', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly misused, such as starting a sentence with 'In contrast' when the preceding information does not provide a direct contrast. Furthermore, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the bottom-ranked countries. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that cohesive devices are used to show logical relationships rather than just acting as sentence starters will improve your score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'production', 'consumption', and 'accounted for'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the China', 'the America', and 'to utilize the electricity'. The definite article 'the' is incorrectly applied to country names, and 'to utilize' is grammatically awkward in this context. While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, these persistent errors in articles and word forms prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on learning the correct collocations for data reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with article usage ('the China', 'the Germany') and punctuation (unnecessary spaces before commas, such as 'In contrast ,'). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage, such as 'consume 856.7 billion kwh' instead of 'consumed'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, pay closer attention to basic sentence construction, article rules, and consistent verb tense usage when describing data.

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