Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The given bar chart indicates the information about the production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014 of the top ten countries.

According to the bar maximum number of electricity production was done by China about 5,398 billion KHW and consumption was slightly less about 5,322 billion KHW. United States production and consumption of electricity was about 4,099 and 3,866 billion KHW respectively. Russia had 1,057 and 1,038 billions KHW on production and consumption respectively. Japan had a production of 936.2 billion KHW of electricity which is slightly more than the India which was 871 billion KHW and the consumption rate was of both the countries was about 856.7 and 698.8 billion KHW in respect.

Furthermore, Canada, France, Brazil, had a 618.9, 561.2, 530.7 billion KHW production of electricity and consumption was about 499.9, 462.9, 455.8 billion KHW. On the other hand Germany had a more consumption rate like 582.5 billion KHW to the production rate of 526.6 billion KHW, meanwhile Republic Korea had the lowest production and consumption rate of electricity about 485.1 and 449.5 billion KHW.

All in all, China had a maximum growth in production and consumption of electricity and Republic of Korea had the least of all in the matter of fact Germany is the country to had consumption rate more than production one.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries and comparing production and consumption figures. You successfully highlighted the main features, such as China's dominance and the unique case of Germany, where consumption exceeded production. However, the report is somewhat list-like, relying heavily on strings of data rather than synthesising the information into broader trends. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping countries by their characteristics (e.g., high-output nations vs. those with lower output) rather than listing them individually. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the overall relationship between production and consumption.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'All in all' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing within sentences is occasionally clunky, such as 'in respect' or 'in the matter of fact'. The progression of ideas is clear, but the flow between individual country data points could be smoother to avoid a repetitive structure. Overall, the paragraphing is appropriate and supports the logical development of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, including terms like 'production', 'consumption', and 'rate'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'maximum number of electricity production' (should be 'highest level of electricity production') and 'in respect' (which is misused here). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Attempting to use more varied reporting verbs or synonyms for 'high' and 'low' would improve the quality of your lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the bar maximum number' (missing 'chart'), 'the India' (unnecessary article), and 'the country to had consumption rate' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in sentence construction that occasionally hinder the flow. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve your accuracy.

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