Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart depicts the information about the electricity prouduced and consumed in specific year.on the one hand chart shows 10 countries ,those use power in various aspects.As china is the major producer and user of power in the year 2014. while, us on secure top second position respectively.On the other hand other nations are also used supply under the one billion kwh.Furrthermore , Russia capicity of produce and consume was nearly one thousand one hundred billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Because the response is only 78 words, it is severely under-developed. While you have identified China and the US as the top producers and consumers, you have not provided a comprehensive summary of the data. Many of the other eight countries listed in the chart are ignored, and the comparisons are too brief to provide a clear overview of the main features. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the task and provide enough detail to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response lacks a clear structure. While you attempt to use cohesive devices like 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand', they are used incorrectly as the content does not follow a logical contrast. The paragraphing is non-existent, and the flow of ideas is disjointed. To improve, you should organize your report into a clear introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific paragraphs detailing the data. Ensure that each sentence connects logically to the next to guide the reader through your analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'prouduced' and 'capicity'. You rely on basic phrasing to describe the data. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'surpassed', or 'fluctuated'. Additionally, ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes, as these errors hinder the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('the' chart), incorrect verb forms ('are also used'), and punctuation issues. The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, which limits your ability to convey complex information clearly. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Practice writing more complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions to link your ideas more effectively.
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