Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This bar graph shows the information of top ten countries for production and Consumption of electricity in 2014.The graph shows the rank of ten countries and electricity production and Consumption.Then ten countries name are china, united states, Russia,Japan, India,Canada, France,Brazil, Germany,Korea.The black line shows the production and grey line shows the consumption of every country.First of all china produced 5398 electricity and consumed 5322 electricity, United States are produced 4099 electricity and consumed 3866 electricity, Russia produced 1057 electricity and consumed 1038 electricity,Japan produced 936.2 and consumed 856.7 electricity upto so on . All countries rank decreased according to production and consumption of electricity. The least production and consumption of electricity of Korea country and more electricity produced and consumed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main topic and listed the countries, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview or a meaningful analysis of the data. You have simply listed figures for several countries without effectively grouping them or highlighting the most significant trends, such as the clear dominance of China and the United States compared to the others. To improve, you must ensure you provide a clear summary of the main features and reach the required length by extending your analysis of the data provided in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The progression of ideas is mechanical, relying on a list-like structure rather than a cohesive summary. There is a lack of linking words or cohesive devices to connect the sentences logically. For example, the transition between the list of countries and the data points is abrupt. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details. Use transition words like 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Notably' to improve the flow between your observations.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt (e.g., 'production', 'consumption', 'electricity'). There are also issues with word choice and capitalization, such as 'Consumption' being capitalized mid-sentence and the phrase 'upto so on' being informal and imprecise. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'generated', 'utilized', 'surpassed', or 'significant disparity'. Avoid repeating the same nouns and verbs in every sentence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('United States are produced'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures ('The least production and consumption of electricity of Korea country'). The response consists mostly of simple sentences, lacking the complex structures required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure subject-verb agreement, and practice using complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to combine your ideas more effectively.

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