Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart given below illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in different countries in 2014, by billion kWh.

Overall, China and the United States ranked number first in producing and consuming electricity. While Russia and Japan, ranked second in production and consumption of electricity. While other countries recorded much lower figures.

China produced 5398 billion kWh and consumed 5322 billion kWh electricity, making in the highest. there was then a significant drop to Russia, which produced 1057 billion kWh and consumed 1038 billion kWh. Japan followed with 936.2 billion kWh of production and 856.7 billion kWh of consumption.

Among the remaining countries, India produced 871 billion kWh and consumed 698.9 billion kWh. Canada, France, Brazil and South Korea also generated slightly more electricity than they used. In contrast, Germany was the only exception, producing 526.6 billion kWh while consuming higher figure of 582.5 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While the key data points are selected, the analysis is somewhat brief. The comparison between production and consumption is handled well, particularly the identification of Germany as an exception. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and include slightly more detail to comfortably exceed the word count, ensuring all parts of the prompt are fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the data. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In contrast' and 'Among the remaining countries', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the sentence structure in the second paragraph is fragmented, particularly the use of 'While' as a sentence starter, which creates a minor coherence issue. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the overall flow could be improved by connecting the sentences more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing for the description of data trends and comparisons. You used terms like 'illustrates', 'recorded', and 'exception' appropriately. However, there are some minor inaccuracies, such as 'ranked number first', which is non-standard phrasing. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited; using more varied synonyms for 'produced' and 'consumed' (e.g., 'generated', 'utilized', 'output') would enhance the lexical quality. The current range is sufficient to convey the meaning but lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'making in the highest' (should be 'making it the highest') and 'consuming higher figure' (missing an article). Additionally, the sentence 'While Russia and Japan, ranked second...' is grammatically incomplete. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall accuracy. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage, and aim for more error-free complex sentences.

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