Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the information about the production and the consumption of electricity in top world top ten countries in the year 2014 . The data is calibrated in billion(KWH).

Overall, the highest country to produce and consume the electricity was China. On the other hand Korea was the lowest. and these two countries. However

On the one hand, China had the highest number of electricity usage and the production with around 5,398 billion KWH of production and the usage 5,322 billion KWH in one year. Secondy United States also had a electrical level like they produce 4,099 billion KWH electricity and the usage was 3,866 billion KWH. However Russia was at the same level of usage and the generation with 1,057 billion KWH and 1,038 billion KWH, approximately at same.

On the other hand Japan and India occupied fourth and fifth position, producing 936.2 and 871 billion KWH respectively. Their electricity consumption was the lowest, at 856.1 billion KWH in Japan and 698.8 billion KWH in India. and Canada France Brazil and Korea also recorded higher production the consumption By contrast, Germany generated 526.6 billion KWH but consumed a higher figure of 582.5 billion KWH making it the only net importer of electricity among the countries shown.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart, such as China's leading position and the contrast between production and consumption in Germany. However, the response is slightly hampered by some unclear phrasing, such as the incomplete sentence 'and these two countries. However'. While you have reported the data accurately, the overview could be more cohesive. To reach a higher band, ensure that all comparisons are fully articulated and avoid fragmented sentences. You have covered the key trends and provided sufficient data points to support your summary, which meets the requirements for a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, there are issues with the flow between sentences. For example, the transition 'and these two countries. However' is grammatically incomplete and disrupts the logical progression. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused, such as starting a sentence with 'and' in the second paragraph. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence is complete will significantly enhance the clarity and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, using terms like 'calibrated', 'consumption', 'generation', and 'net importer'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'highest country to produce' (it should be 'country with the highest production') and 'electrical level'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you can convey information clearly, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with punctuation, missing articles, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Secondy United States also had a electrical level'). Some sentences are poorly constructed, which occasionally forces the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. To improve, focus on basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Increasing your control over these fundamental areas will help you achieve a higher score.

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