Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrate of top country's (china, United States, Russia,japan,india,canada,france,Brazil, germany,korea,rep) uses of electricity on production and consumption in 2014 .it is measured in billion kwh.

Overall,The production and consumption uses of electricity in differents country's china is the highest rank country both production and consumption in addition 2nd rank united states.japana and India,canada, france and Brazil as similar production and consumption as well as.

In china as the high consume electricity compare to others country's electricity used in production 5,398 billion kwh and consumption 5,322 billion kwh. moreover, 2nd Highest rank united states in 4,099 production and consumption 3,866 billion kwh.The both countries are used High electricity.

In remind eight country's as 1,057 billion kwh to 485.1 billion kwh production and 1,038 billion kwh to 449.5 billion kwh consumption in electricity used in country's are Russia and japan,india ,canada,france,Brazil,germany,korea . This all countries are consumed electricity compare to twice time less in China.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the bar chart, such as the leading positions of China and the United States. However, the reporting of data is inconsistent and lacks precision. For example, the grouping of the remaining eight countries is vague, and the comparison 'twice time less' is mathematically unclear and awkward. While the key trends are identified, the analysis lacks the depth required for a higher band, as it fails to effectively contrast the production and consumption figures across all ten countries, instead relying on a somewhat repetitive listing of numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In remind eight country's' and 'This all countries'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where the transition between the data points and the summary statement is weak. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of sophisticated linking words limits the flow of the text, making the overall structure feel somewhat rudimentary.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word formation and collocation. Examples include 'top country's' instead of 'top countries', 'uses of electricity' instead of 'electricity usage', and 'high consume' instead of 'high consumption'. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the persistent errors in basic word forms and the inability to use more precise terminology for data comparison prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The bar chart illustrate'), incorrect pluralization ('country's'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent capitalization and spacing. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity, such as 'japana and India,canada, france and Brazil as similar production and consumption as well as.' These frequent errors, particularly in basic sentence construction, significantly impact the readability of the response.

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