Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the consumption and production of electricity in the top ten countries in the year 2014.

Overall, China is the first country and U.S.A was the second highest country that produced and consumed the electricity. In most countries, electricity production is higher than consumption, while Germany was the only country where consumption exceeded production.

To begin with , China was at the first rank in the production with 5398 billion kWh and consumption of electricity was 5322 billion kWh. U.S.A ranked second producing around 4099 billion kWh and using 3866 billion kWh. Both countries recorded much higher figures than the remaining nations. Russia ranked third followed by Japan and India. Their production and consumption figures were much lower than those of China and United states. Countries such as Canada, France, Brazil and South korea has similar level of electricity generation and use. Germany was only country where electricity consumption was higher than production.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully identifies the main features of the bar chart, such as the dominance of China and the U.S.A. and the unique position of Germany regarding consumption. You have selected relevant data points to support your summary. However, the report could be improved by providing more specific comparisons for the remaining countries (e.g., Russia, Japan, India) rather than grouping them together with vague descriptions. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a more detailed overview of the trends across all ten countries, rather than focusing heavily on the top two.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Overall' to guide the reader. However, the transition between the overview and the body paragraph is slightly abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas flows more naturally between sentences, particularly when comparing the data of the different nations.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'consumption', 'production', and 'generation' correctly. However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive, and there are minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'first country' instead of 'leading country' or 'highest producer'. To achieve a higher score, incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid repeating the same phrasing when describing the figures for different countries.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'U.S.A was the second highest country that produced' (should be 'second-highest producer') and 'Germany was only country' (missing article 'the'). Additionally, there is a subject-verb agreement error in 'South korea has similar level' (should be 'have similar levels'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the score in this criterion.

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