Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in ten nations in the year 2014.
Overall, it can be seen that China and the US produced and used more electricity compared to other countries. In contrast, Korea was listed last in terms of electricity consumption and production.
To commence with, China produced 5,398 billion kWh of electricity, and utilised 5,322 billion kWh of electricity in the year 2014, followed by the US, which generated 4,099 billion kWh of electricity
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 81 words long. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction and overview are clear, the body paragraph is severely underdeveloped. It only covers the first two countries (China and the US) and fails to report on the remaining eight countries or provide meaningful comparisons across the full data set. To achieve a higher band, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed by including data for all categories and providing a more comprehensive summary of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is logically organized with an introduction, an overview, and the beginning of a body paragraph. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'To commence with' are used appropriately to guide the reader. However, because the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, the overall progression is interrupted. The paragraphing is appropriate for the length provided, but the lack of completion prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure you complete your analysis of all data points and use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link your comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with accurate terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'generated', and 'utilised'. However, the range is limited due to the brevity of the text. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations. To improve, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'a significant margin'. The current vocabulary is functional but does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is generally accurate in the sentences provided, with no major errors that impede communication. You have used a mix of simple and complex structures, such as the introductory clause 'In contrast, Korea was listed last...'. However, the range of structures is limited by the short length of the response. To improve, aim to incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as passive voice constructions or relative clauses, and ensure that all sentences are fully completed to demonstrate better control.
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