Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the amount of electricity produced and consumed for top ten countries in the year 2014.

Overall, China saw highest amount of production and consumption of electricity whereas Korean with least producing and consuming in 2014. The units of production and consumption of electricity are calculated in billion Kilo-watt hour( Kwh)

The production of electricity in China for 5,398 ranked the highest among all. Followed by United States has produced 4,099 which is the second highest electricity producing country. Russia, Japan and India, produced 1,057 ,936.2, and 871 billion Kwh respectively. Furthermore, Canada, France and Brazil had neither highest nor the lowest production of 618.9, 561.2, 530.7 billion Kwh respectively. Lastly, Germany and Korean had the lowest production of electricity for 526.6 and 485.1 in the year 2014.

The amount of electricity consumed in China was the highest for 5,322. The second highest consumption was in United States with 3,866. Followed by Russia and Japan consumed 1,038 and 856.7 billion Kwh whereas consumption in India and Germany was 698.8 and 582.5 respectively. Canada and France had neither the highest nor the lowest consumption of electricity for 499.9 and 462.9 billion Kwh. Lastly, Brazil and Korean had the least consumption for 455.8 and 449.5 respectively in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries and reporting on both production and consumption. The overview is clear, identifying China as the leader and South Korea as the lowest. However, the report is essentially a list of data points. To reach a higher band, you should focus more on meaningful comparisons and grouping data rather than listing each country sequentially. For instance, noting that China and the US are significantly ahead of the other eight countries would provide a more analytical summary of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Paragraphing is appropriate, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Followed by', and 'Lastly' are used to link sentences. However, the use of these devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. To improve, try to vary the transition words and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than just a sequence of data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing for clear communication of the data. You use terms like 'illustrates', 'production', and 'consumption' correctly. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Korean' instead of 'South Korea' and 'for 5,398' instead of 'at 5,398'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited; using more varied synonyms for 'highest' or 'lowest' and more precise reporting verbs would enhance the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'China saw highest amount' (missing 'the') and 'Germany and Korean had the lowest production... for 526.6' (preposition error). Additionally, there are some issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for articles and prepositions would be beneficial.

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