Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The following chart depicts the ranked standings of countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, each countries have different numbers with respect to the production and the consumption. However China and USA are marginally ahead from rest of the countries in both categories while securing top two positions respectively.
Firstly china securing the top rank produces 5396 billion kwh and consumes 5322 billion kwh of electricity. Likewise USA at second position consumes 3856 billion kwh and produces 4099 billion kwh of elctricity. However Russia, Japan and India are at next three position having numbers of 1057, 936.2 and 871 billion kwh in production and 1036, 856.7 and 698 billion kwh in consumption respectively.
Furthermore the next five countires including Canda, France, Brazil, Germany and korea have almost same figures in production and consumption of elcetricity. Like canada produces and consumes maximum amount of 618.9 and 499.9 billion kwh elctricity among these five countries. However korea have the least numbers of 485.1 and 449.5 billion kwh in production and consumption of electricity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top two countries and grouping the remaining eight. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention China and the USA are ahead, you do not explicitly compare the production and consumption figures for all countries, which is a key requirement for Task 1. The grouping of the 'next five' is a good attempt at synthesis, but the data presentation is a bit repetitive. To improve, ensure you highlight the most significant trends or anomalies, such as which countries produce more than they consume versus those that consume more than they produce.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, moving from an overview to specific details. Cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Likewise', and 'Furthermore' are used to connect ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel forced. For example, the jump between the top two countries and the next three could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the grouping of countries is slightly confusing. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring clear logical progression between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing for clear communication of the data. You use terms like 'ranked standings', 'categories', and 'figures' appropriately. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'elctricity', 'elctronicity', 'Canda', and 'korea' (which should be capitalized). These errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'surpass', 'exceed', or 'marginal difference', and ensure consistent accuracy in spelling and capitalization.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Subject-verb agreement is an issue, such as 'each countries have' (should be 'each country has') and 'korea have' (should be 'Korea has'). There are also issues with article usage and punctuation, such as missing commas after introductory phrases. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they are frequent enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for basic grammatical slips will help improve your accuracy.
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