Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Introduction

The given bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

overall

In this bar chart China and United states has more produced and high consumption rate comparison to all other countries but in both countries China has high numbers rather than United states.

Body Paragraph 1

Number of countries are given in this bar chart like Russia, Japan, India and so own but Russia and Japan electricity production has same but consumption has slightly lower than Russia. Russia produced 1057kwh billion electricity and Japan production was 936.2billion kwh.

Body Paragraph 2

Canada, France and korea they all production consumption has way less than others . their consumption and production both were lower than china and US. Eelectricity production in korea 485.1 billion and consumption was 449 billlion kwh. in comparison to other countries korea has less in prodution or consumption rather than other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies the main features, such as the dominance of China and the US, but the analysis is superficial. While it attempts to compare countries, the selection of data is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview of the trends across the ten countries. The report fails to group the data effectively, leading to a fragmented summary. Some figures are mentioned, but the lack of a structured approach to comparing the top, middle, and lower tiers of the chart prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure all key data points are synthesized rather than listing individual countries in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response uses basic paragraphing, but the logical progression is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as 'and so own' (and so on) and 'in comparison to other countries korea has less'. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between production and consumption. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'similarly') to connect ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'high numbers', 'way less', and 'has less' are imprecise and lack the academic tone required for Task 1. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'has more produced' instead of 'higher production'. The range is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To improve, focus on using more academic verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', 'significant', and 'marginal'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('China and United states has'), incorrect verb forms ('production consumption has way less'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are predominantly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and spacing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly before country names and nouns.

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