Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph depicts information about usage of electricity by top ten nations. The data of elctricity is given in billion kwh.

Overall , China was the lagest producer and consumer among all the nations at 5398 and 5322 billion kwh respectively. Moreover United state is the second lagest producer and consumer .The production of electricity in Russia is equal to the consumption at a1057 and 1038 billion kwh respectively. Japan, India and Canada followed a downward trend of production and consumption of electricity.

On the remaining hand, In France the consumption of electricity is 100 billion kwh less than the production followed by brazil. Whereas germany produces 526 billion kwh electricity but consumes 582 billion kwh which was greater than the production . At last Korea have lowest production and consumption of electricity among all the countries such as 485 and 449 billion kwh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data, such as identifying China as the leader and noting the production/consumption trends. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which limits the depth of analysis. While the key countries are mentioned, the comparison between production and consumption could be more detailed. The report lacks a clear overview of the general trends across all ten countries, and the under-length penalty prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary of the data and meet the minimum word count requirement to fully develop your points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'On the remaining hand' and 'At last'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is present but could be better balanced to separate the overview from the specific data points. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a more cohesive flow throughout the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'lagest' (largest), 'elctricity' (electricity), and 'united state' (United States). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying heavily on basic terms like 'production' and 'consumption'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied synonyms and ensure accurate spelling. Using more precise terminology to describe trends, such as 'surpassed' or 'exceeded', would also enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues like 'Korea have' instead of 'Korea has' and 'United state is' instead of 'The United States is'. Additionally, there are punctuation and capitalization errors, such as 'a1057' and 'brazil' (should be capitalized). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to affect the clarity of the report. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent capitalization will significantly improve your accuracy.

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