Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of electricity in ten countries by 2014.

Overall, China and USA are leading the proportion in terms of both consumption and production. While Russia has same rate of production and consumption.

The production and consumption of electricity is highest in China about 5398 billion KWh production and 5322 billion KWh of consumption followed by USA which has 4099 billion KWh production and 3866 billion KWh of consumption.

Russia and Korea have almost equal rates of consumption and production. While, the rate of consumption is slightly higher in Germany at 582.5 billion compared to526.6 billion of production.

Japan,India, canada, France and Brazil have more consumption rates than electricity production.

Finally, China and USA have highest rates of production and consumption remaining eight countries have relatively small contribution in terms of both production and consumption of electricity. Meanwhile, the rate of production and consumption is quite equal in Russia and Korea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the bar chart, identifying the leading countries (China and USA) and noting the relationship between production and consumption. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention that China and the USA lead, you could have provided a more nuanced comparison of the gap between production and consumption for these top countries. Additionally, the grouping of the remaining eight countries is a bit vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly integrated into a cohesive narrative rather than listing figures, and provide a more precise summary of the trends observed across the ten nations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, the transition 'While' is used frequently and sometimes incorrectly, such as in 'While Russia has same rate...'. The connection between sentences could be smoother; some ideas feel like isolated statements rather than a flowing report. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the former', 'the latter') is used accurately would significantly enhance the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the basic information about electricity production and consumption. However, the range is limited and there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'leading the proportion' and 'has same rate'. There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to data analysis, such as 'surpass', 'account for', or 'a significant margin', and avoid repeating the same phrases throughout the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as missing articles ('in China about 5398 billion', 'compared to526.6 billion') and issues with subject-verb agreement or preposition usage ('has same rate'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they indicate a lack of control over more complex structures. Focusing on proofreading for basic articles and ensuring consistent verb forms will help improve your accuracy.

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