Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This bar chart is saw a 2014 electricity which country most use. And in bar chart saw a top 10 country list in last country korea and first country china. China is first because largest population and many moles, and other type of electricity use. So basically first number of china. China in electricity bill was a production is 5398 and consumption was 5322. And second United States is top ten in China latter. In top country in most popular states like 1. China 2. United States 3. Russia 4. Japan. 5. India 6. Canada 7. France 8. Brazil 9. Germany 10. Korea
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped. While you identify the top countries, you do not provide a clear summary of the main features or meaningful comparisons between production and consumption. The explanation for China's position is speculative and not based on the data provided. To improve, you must describe the data accurately, highlight key trends (such as the gap between production and consumption for specific countries), and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. It is written as a single paragraph with very limited use of cohesive devices. The progression of ideas is disjointed, moving abruptly from a general introduction to specific data points without clear transitions. The use of numbering (1. China, 2. United States, etc.) is an inappropriate way to present data in an academic report. To improve, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and body paragraphs that group data logically. Use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrasing such as 'most use' and 'first country'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'many moles' (which is unclear) and 'China latter' (which is confusing). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the ability to describe statistical data effectively. To improve, you should learn specific terminology for describing charts, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', 'the highest figure', and 'in terms of'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and nouns will help you convey information more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'This bar chart is saw a 2014 electricity', 'China in electricity bill was a production is 5398', and 'United States is top ten in China latter'. These errors indicate a lack of control over basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence construction first, ensuring you have a clear subject and verb in every sentence. Gradually work on combining sentences using relative clauses or conjunctions to improve your range.
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