Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph demonstrates the generation and usage of electrical energy by the top ten countries in 2014. Overview, China featured on the first place on a list and Korea Rep at the last.
In 2014, China was having the highest population due to that the production of energy was 5,398 billion kWh in which, the consumption was nearly same 5,322 billion kWh. United States featured second, electricity generation was 4,099 billion kWh and the usage of it was 3,866 billion kWh. Moreover, Russia holds the third position in which, energy production and consumption was almost similar the difference was of only 20 billion kWh.
Furthermore, countries like Japan, India and Canada stood at the midrange category the generation of energy was between [redacted phone] billion kWh and consumption was around [redacted phone] billion kWh. When we talk about the last three countries in which, France, Brazil and Germany featured the less generation as well as usage they all were between [redacted phone] billion kWh. At the end, the least energy generation was of Korea, Rep 485 billion kWh and consumption was of 449.5 billion kWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the top and bottom countries. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the claim that China had the highest production because it had the 'highest population' is an external assumption not supported by the provided chart. Furthermore, the grouping of countries into 'midrange' and 'last three' is a bit imprecise, as the data points are specific. To reach a higher band, you should focus more on comparing the relationship between production and consumption across all countries rather than listing them individually, and ensure your analysis remains strictly within the provided data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression from the overview to specific details. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'At the end' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. For example, 'Overview, China featured...' is grammatically awkward and lacks a proper cohesive link to the rest of the sentence. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'When we talk about the last three countries in which...', which disrupts the flow of the sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the data points clearly. You use terms like 'generation', 'consumption', and 'billion kWh' correctly. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'featured on the first place' (should be 'ranked first') and 'the least energy generation was of Korea' (should be 'Korea had the lowest energy generation'). The range is somewhat limited, relying on repetitive structures to describe the figures. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and comparative adjectives would improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Examples include 'China was having the highest population due to that the production...' and 'the usage of it was 3,866 billion kWh'. The use of articles and prepositions is inconsistent, and some sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence construction will be beneficial.
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