Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, China was ranked as the first country with the highest consumption and production rate of electricity in 2014. Similarly, Korea Rep. was the last country in terms of electricity production while Brazil was the lowest in terms of consumption.

As per the rank of consumption rate, China was the first country with 5322 units. This was followed by the United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada and France each recording 3866, 1038, 856.7, 698.8, 499.9 and 462.9 respectively. Similarly, Brazil was the last country with only 455.8 Closer to her was the Germany and Korea Rep. Each accounting for 582.5 and 449.5 respectively.

On the other hand, China recorded the highest production of electricity of 5398 units. This was followed by the United States, Russia, Japan India, Canada and France. Each country recorded 4099, 1057, 936.2 871, 618.9 and 561.2 respectively. The country that recorded the least amount of electricity produced was the Korea Rep. with only 485.1. Closer to that was the Germany and Brazil accounting for 526.6 and 530.7 each.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries for both production and consumption. You have successfully highlighted the main features, such as China's leading position in both categories. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on listing figures rather than synthesizing the data. For instance, while you mention the rankings, you could improve by grouping countries with similar trends or highlighting the significant gap between China and the rest of the list. The comparison between production and consumption is present, but it could be more analytical to better meet the requirements for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on consumption and production respectively. The use of cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'Similarly' helps the flow of information. However, some transitions feel slightly repetitive or mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, but the paragraphing could be improved by ensuring that comparisons between the two categories are more integrated rather than treating them as two separate lists. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, such as 'illustrates', 'recording', and 'accounting for'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive, particularly in the way you introduce the data points. There are also some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'Closer to her was the Germany', where 'her' is an inappropriate pronoun for a country, and the phrasing 'As per the rank of consumption rate' is slightly unnatural. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'recorded' or 'accounted for' and improve the precision of your descriptive language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the Germany' (the definite article is unnecessary here) and 'each recording 3866, 1038... respectively' (the list structure is slightly awkward). Additionally, there are punctuation errors, such as missing commas in lists (e.g., 'Japan India, Canada'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will help improve your accuracy.

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