Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart depicts about the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in a particular year..The data has been caliberated in kilo watt per hour [kWh].
overall,it is crystal clear that the production of electricity in china was highest among other countries stimately similar to the consumption in particular country while as compare with least production and consumption of electricity in korea in the given period of time.
At a fleeting glance, china produce and consume maximum amount of electricity due to its higher population about 5,398 kWh and moderately consumption were approximately 5,398 kWh followed by united states of america with production of 4,099 billion kwh and consumption of 3,866 billion kwh . the difference between the production of electricity in china and united state is 1,299 billion kWh ,and the difference in consumption is 1,456 billion kWh.
Moving further, Germany consumes more electricity at 528.5 kWh as compare to brazil and france approximately 530.7 and 561.2 respectively. interestingly russia experience same production and consumption of electricity . the least consumption and production of electricity is experience in korea with approximately 485.1 and 449.5 billion kWh .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top and bottom countries. However, the data presentation is inconsistent and contains significant inaccuracies. For instance, the student states China's production is 5,398 kWh, but the chart indicates 5,398 billion kWh. Furthermore, the comparison between Germany, Brazil, and France is confusingly phrased and mathematically imprecise. While the overview is present, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the failure to consistently use the correct units (billion kWh) limits the effectiveness of the report. The response addresses the task requirements but lacks the necessary accuracy to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or awkward, such as 'At a fleeting glance' and 'Moving further'. There are issues with referencing and logical flow; for example, the transition between the comparison of China/USA and the subsequent paragraph about Germany is abrupt. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and unnecessary double periods, which disrupts the flow of the text. Overall, the organisation is clear enough to follow, but the cohesion is not always managed skilfully.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'caliberated in' are used incorrectly in this context, and 'moderately consumption' is grammatically incorrect. The student attempts to use some specific terminology, but the misuse of units (omitting 'billion') and the repetitive use of 'production and consumption' suggest a limited range. There are also spelling errors, such as 'stimately' instead of 'estimated' and 'usa' (not capitalised). To improve, the student should focus on using precise terminology and ensuring units are correctly stated.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'china produce and consume'), incorrect preposition use, and missing articles. The sentence structure is often clunky, such as 'while as compare with least production'. Punctuation is a significant weakness, with many instances of missing spaces after full stops and inconsistent capitalisation. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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