Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart depicts the the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in a particular year..The data has been caliberated in kilo watt per hour [kWh].
overall,it is crystal clear that the production of electricity in China was highest among other countries stimately similar to the consumption in particular country while as compare with least production and consumption of electricity in korea in the given period of time.
At a fleeting glance, china produces and consumes maximum amount of electricity due to its higher population about 5,398 kWh and moderate consumption was approximately 5,398 kWh followed by United States of America with production of 4,099 billion kwh and consumption of 3,866 billion kwh . the difference between the production of electricity in China and United State is 1,299 billion kWh ,and the difference in consumption is 1,456 billion kWh.
Moving further, Germany consumes more electricity at 528.5 kWh as compare to Brazil and France approximately 530.7 and 561.2 respectively. interestingly Russia experience same production and consumption of electricity . the least consumption and production of electricity is experience in korea with approximately 485.1 and 449.5 billion kWh .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state China's production is 5,398 kWh, but the chart indicates 5,398 billion kWh. Furthermore, the comparison between Germany, Brazil, and France is confusingly presented, and the claim that Russia experiences the same production and consumption is not clearly supported by the visual data. While you attempt to highlight key differences, the lack of precision in citing the units and the misinterpretation of some figures prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe data points and focus on clear, comparative summaries rather than listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or awkward, such as 'Moving further' and 'At a fleeting glance'. The flow between sentences is occasionally disrupted by grammatical errors and punctuation issues, such as the double periods and inconsistent capitalization. While there is a logical progression from an overview to specific details, the connections between ideas could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of imprecise word choice and spelling errors. For example, 'caliberated' is used incorrectly, and 'stimately' is a misspelling of 'estimated'. The repetition of 'production and consumption' is expected in this task, but the lack of varied synonyms for 'highest' or 'lowest' limits the range. There are also issues with unit notation, as you omit 'billion' in several places, which is a key lexical requirement for this data set. To improve, work on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure you proofread for spelling and unit accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in korea'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'Russia experience'), and inconsistent capitalization. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and unnecessary double periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent use of articles, and standard punctuation rules.
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