Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given horizontal bar graph illustrates about data on the top ten nations for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 . The data has calibrated into billion kWh .

Overall , it is crystal clear that Russia has balanced in consumption and production of electricity and also in the top most countries .

At a fleeting glance , the China was at first rank in electricity usage around 5400 kWh . Then followed by USA where was production of electricity was more than consumption . The difference was nearly 800 kWh . Our INDIA was at fifth rank as there was production of electricity was 871 kWh and consumption was 698.8 kWh .

Moreover , there was shown that France and Brazil had almost same rate of production and consumption but France was at seventh position and Brazil was at eighth position . Germany was only nation who has more consumption then production of electricity . The ten rank was occupied by Korea with production 485.1 kWh of electricity and consumption was 449.5 kWh .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, such as identifying China as the leader and noting the production/consumption differences for countries like the USA and Germany. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the report lacks a clear overview of the general trend or a more detailed comparison between the top and bottom countries. The mention of 'Our INDIA' is inappropriate for an academic report, as it introduces a subjective tone. While the key features are present, the data reporting is occasionally imprecise, such as stating China's usage was 'around 5400 kWh' without specifying the unit clearly in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'At a fleeting glance' or 'The ten rank was occupied by'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly when moving between countries. While the paragraphing is sufficient, the logical flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words that connect the comparisons more fluidly rather than listing facts in isolation.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'The data has calibrated into' and 'balanced in consumption'. The use of 'top most countries' is non-standard. While the student successfully uses technical terms like 'production' and 'consumption', the range is limited, and there is a reliance on basic sentence structures to convey numerical data. More precise collocations would improve the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'the China was at first rank', 'where was production of electricity was more', and 'Germany was only nation who has more consumption then production'. The misuse of articles ('the China') and errors in subject-verb agreement are persistent. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures, keeping the score in the mid-range.

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