Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, China and the United States were by far the largest producers and consumers of electricity, while the remaining countries recorded lower figures. In most countries, electricity production was higher than consumption with Germany being the only exception.
The highest production rate of electricity is by the top first ranked country China which is producing 5,398 billion kWh electricity whereas consuming similar ,that is 5,322 billion kWh. The second top ranked country is United States that is making 4,099 billion kWh electricity and using 3,866 billion kWh .The third top ranked country is Russia that drop to the 1,057 billion kWh production of electricity and consumption of 1,038 billion kWh
Among the other countries Japan produced 936.2 billion kWh and consumed 856.7 billion kWh, While India generating 871 billion kWh and consuming 698.8 billion kWh electricity .Canada and France is generating 618.9 and 561.2 billion kWh, respectively, while their consumption levels were lower at 499.9 and 462.9 billion kWh.
The bottom three positions of country are Brazil, Germany and Korea .Brazil is generating 5307 billion kWh and consuming 45.8 billion kWh. Whereas Germany is producing is less than consuming more that is 526.6 billion kWh and 582.5 billion kWh ,Korea production rate is 485.1 526.6 billion kWh and consuming rate is 449.5 526.6 billion kWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview and identifies key trends, such as the dominance of China and the US. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, Brazil's production is cited as 5307 billion kWh, which is a major misreading of the chart, and the figures for Korea are garbled and repetitive. While the main features are selected, the lack of precision in reporting the data prevents a higher score. The comparison between production and consumption is attempted, but the data errors undermine the accuracy of the summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, moving from an overview to specific details. Cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'while', and 'respectively' are used to link ideas. However, the progression within the final paragraph is confusing due to the repetitive and incorrect data presentation. The referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of some transitions and the errors in the final paragraph affect the overall flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'production', 'consumption', and 'respectively'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'top first ranked country' and 'bottom three positions of country'. Some vocabulary is used repetitively, and the errors in the final paragraph (e.g., 'producing is less than consuming more') indicate a lack of precision. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning but lacks the flexibility required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Canada and France is generating') and awkward sentence construction ('Germany is producing is less than consuming more'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors is noticeable and occasionally impedes the reader's ability to follow the data accurately. More attention to proofreading and basic sentence structure is needed.
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