Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The photo describe the upper class ten countries for the making and producing more than electricity as compare to other countries in 2014. overall, the tow states use electricity in extreme level as compare to other eight countries.

Firstly, china create 5389 billion kWh electricity in one year and utilization 5322 billion kWh in 2014 and its a topped ranked to use or create in electricity. USA make 4099 billion kWh and use 3866 kWh electricity. Russia generate 1057 and use 1038 kWh other side japan use 936.2 and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to identify the top countries, the report is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence. The overview is present but lacks sufficient detail to provide a clear summary of the main features. Because the response is unfinished and fails to meet the length requirement, it does not adequately cover the data provided in the chart, leading to a low score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a clear structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at an introduction and a body paragraph, the lack of a conclusion and the abrupt ending make it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and mechanical way (e.g., 'Firstly', 'other side'). Paragraphing is insufficient, and the overall flow is disrupted by the unfinished state of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'making' and 'producing' instead of more precise academic vocabulary such as 'generation' or 'output'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'utilization' used as a verb and 'extreme level'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands, and the errors in word form and usage are noticeable throughout the short text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The photo describe', 'tow states use'), incorrect verb forms ('china create'), and awkward phrasing ('its a topped ranked to use or create in electricity'). The sentence structures are simple and often lack the necessary complexity or accuracy expected at higher levels. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the incomplete sentences further detract from the grammatical control shown.

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