Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates how much creating and spent electricity in different ten country China, United states, Russia, japan, India, Canada, France, brazil, Germany, and Korea in 2014.
Overall, highest manufacture and use in china and very lowest uses and development of electricity in Korea. All country making more electricity compare to uses but one country was spent more electricity compare to production.
china was the largest production of the electricity, generating 5398 billion KWH while consumption 5322 billion KWH. The united kingdom rank second to produced electricity about 4099 billion KWH and use to 3866 billion KWH. Russia was distance third with production 1057 billion KWH and consumption 1038 billion KWH.
Japan and India produced 936 and 871 billion KWH, while their consumption about 856 and 698 billion KWH. Canada, Brazil and France produced more electricity 618, 530 and 561 billion KWH and spent about 499, 455, 462 billion KWH.
Germany produced 526 billion KWH while spent more compare to. production 582. At last Korea generated 485 billion KWH and consumption was 449 billion KWH.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state the 'United Kingdom' ranks second, whereas the chart refers to the 'United States'. Additionally, you mention that 'one country was spent more electricity compare to production', which is a correct observation regarding Germany, but the overall summary lacks precision. While you have selected the main features, the misidentification of countries and some confusing phrasing regarding the data points prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully transcribe the labels from the chart and double-check your comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or missing, leading to a choppy flow. For example, phrases like 'At last' and 'All country making' are used awkwardly. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by grammatical errors that make the relationship between sentences unclear. While there is an overall attempt at a logical arrangement, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structures limit the coherence of the response. Using a wider variety of transition signals would improve the flow significantly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'produced' and 'consumption'. There are also instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'creating and spent electricity' instead of 'electricity generation and consumption' and 'distance third' instead of 'a distant third'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the frequent errors in word form (e.g., 'manufacture' instead of 'manufacturing') indicate a limited range. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data reporting and ensure correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'All country making', 'china was the largest production') and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'Germany produced 526 billion KWH while spent more compare to. production 582.' Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of periods and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors in tense and pluralization.
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