Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE BAR CHART DESCRIBE ABOUT TOP TEN COUNTRIES FOR THE PRODUCTION AND UTILIZATION OF ELECTRICITY IN 2014.
OVERALL , GIVING RANK FOR PRODUCTION AND UTILIZATION OF POWER TO ALL COUNTRIES.CHINA COUNTRY ACHIEVE THE FIRST RANK IN CONSUMPTION BOTH PRODUCTION AND ELECTRICTY WHILE THE KOREA GOT TENTH POSITION.GERMANY UTILIZE EXCEEDED ENERGY.
IN 2014 CHINA CONSUME 5398 (BILLION kWh) IN ELECTRICITY AND INVEST 5322 (BILLION kWh) IN MANUFACTURING.THE UNITED STATES FOLLOWED THE SCEOND PLACE WITH PRODUCTION AND USE OF CURRENT FIGURES OF 4099 AND 3866 BILLION kWh.
AMONG THE REMAINING COUNTRIES RUSSIA OCCUPIED A THIRD POSTION WITH 1057 kWh AND 1038 kWh. JAPAN AND INDIA GENREATED 936.2 AND 8711 BILLION kWh.AT THE LOWER END OF THE RANKING CANADA,FRANCE, BRAZIL,GERMANY AND KOREA THEY ARE RECORDED BELOW 620 BILLION kWh FOR BOTH PRODUCTION AND ELECTRICITY..
IN CONCLUSION THE GRAPH SHOWS THE ELECTRICTY OPRODUCTION GENERALLY EXCEEDED CONSUMPTION WITH CHINA AND UNITED STSTES DOMINATING BOTH MEASURES.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as identifying the top countries and noting the general trend that production exceeds consumption. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states India generated '8711 billion kWh', which is a misreading of the data, and the grouping of countries at the lower end is vague. While the main features are selected, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the failure to make meaningful comparisons between the countries prevents this from reaching a higher band. The overview is present but lacks clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, such as the transition 'IN CONCLUSION' which introduces a summary rather than a synthesis. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, particularly in the paragraph listing the remaining countries. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall flow is hindered by the repetitive structure of the sentences. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively utilized to group related data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'production', 'consumption', and 'countries'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'invest' instead of 'produce' and 'genreated' (spelling error). The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, often repeating the same phrases. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of control, and spelling errors like 'ELECTRICTY' and 'SCEOND' are frequent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies primarily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('CHINA COUNTRY ACHIEVE', 'CHINA CONSUME'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing spaces after periods). Complex structures are largely absent or attempted with significant errors. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the text difficult to read, although the core message remains understandable. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent punctuation.
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