Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph elucidates the information about peak ten nations for the man making and utilizing of hydric electric energy in the year of 2014. At a first glance, it can be promptly noticed that there was chine and united staty are was reached achied top value in manufactivity and consumption of static energy.
From a given stattestic statistics, it is apparent that the highest amount of utilizing 5,398 (billion kWh) of makin generating of power was in china. While, the lowest percentage value 485.9 485.1 (billion kWh) was accounted for the making of static energy in korea. Rep. Moreover, integen of utilizing the power source in brazil, germany and france was in the range between 455.8 billion (kWh) and 582.5 (billion kWh).
On the Conversely, the whole quantity of generating and uely The electro energy was reported in nation so canada with 618.9 (billion kWh) and 499.9 (billion kWh) respectively. Furthermore, there was marginal disparity between figure figure of russia and Japan Japan in production of electricity and with 936.2 (billion kWh) and the later as with 1.057 (billion kWh).
The major conclusion that can be drawn from the bar graph was that korea faced the least value of in both product generating and consumrp consumption of static energy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states China's consumption is 5,398 billion kWh, which is not supported by the provided data, and the comparison between Russia and Japan is confusingly phrased. While the key trends are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the failure to clearly distinguish between production and consumption for all countries mentioned limits the development of the response. The overview is present but lacks clarity due to poor phrasing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'On the Conversely' and 'the later as with'. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly when referring to specific countries or data points, which disrupts the flow of information. The progression of ideas is hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the ten nations effectively. Paragraphing is present but the internal logic within paragraphs is weak.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. The student uses non-standard terms like 'man making', 'hydric electric energy', and 'static energy' instead of 'electricity generation' or 'consumption'. There are also frequent spelling errors and word-choice issues, such as 'stattestic' for 'statistics' and 'uely' which appears to be a typo. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, and the persistent errors in terminology and spelling significantly impede the reader's understanding of the data presented.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that affect readability. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement ('chine and united staty are was reached'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, such as 'the major conclusion that can be drawn from the bar graph was that korea faced the least value of in both product generating and consumrp consumption'. Simple sentences are also prone to errors. The lack of control over basic grammar and punctuation makes the text difficult to process.
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