Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph illustrates the information about generation and utilization of electricity(billion kWh) in top ten countries of the world in the year 2014.
Overall, China and United States produce and consume a high amount of electricity. In contrast, Korea present in to bottom of list because of little utilization and production by individuals. Additionally, Russia showed a balance between these components.
It is evident that, China produce greater amount of electricity that was 5,398 billion kWh. Generation of power decreased through all the countries. US making 4,099 billion kWh power meanwhile, India generate 871 kWh energy only. Furthermore, current production in Brazil, Germany and Korea was 530.7, 526.6 and 485.1 billion kWh respectively.
Moving to consumption, China and US utilize large amount of energy that was 5,322 and 3,866 billion kWh respectively. Rest of the countries had less than half of the energy consumption form these two countries that was 856.7, 698.8, 499.9 and 582 billion kWh in Japan, India, Canada and Germany respectively. However, Korea consume only 449.5 electricity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the statement 'Generation of power decreased through all the countries' is factually incorrect based on the data provided, as the chart shows specific values for each country rather than a chronological trend. While the key countries are mentioned, the comparison between production and consumption could be more analytical. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the relationship between the two variables across the top ten countries.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on production and consumption. Cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'Moving to' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'Rest of the countries had less than half of the energy consumption form these two countries that was 856.7...', where the structure becomes convoluted and difficult to follow. Paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences could be smoother.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'utilization', 'generation', and 'respectively' used correctly. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing and word choice, such as 'present in to bottom of list' and 'little utilization'. The range is somewhat limited, and the student relies on repetitive structures. To reach a higher band, the student should incorporate more precise collocations and avoid basic errors in word formation, such as using 'form' instead of 'from' and 'consume' instead of 'consumed'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('China produce', 'Korea consume') and missing articles ('in to bottom of list'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency. The student should focus on ensuring consistent verb tense usage and correct article placement to improve accuracy.
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