Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the data showing the production and usage of the electricity of top ten countries in the year 2014.

Overall, the country displaying the highest rate of consumption as well as usage is China, whilst, in contrast, the country showing the least rate is Korea and somehow Germany also falls near the lowest rate.

China produces 5,398 billion KWh electricity in 2014 out of which 5,398 billion KWh used, meanwhile the country counts for the second position in the column is US, showing 3,866 of electricity is used out of 4,099. These two countries shows the highest ratio of electricity consumption as well as production. In contradiction, other countries as such as Russia and japan produces 1,057 and 936 BKWh respectively.India produces 871, meanwhile, 698 used.Canada uses only 499 billionKWh. Furthermore, France utilized 462 and Brazil 455. Germany is the only country showing more consumption (526) than the usage (582) In addition, Korea is at last number with the production of 485 billion KWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart, such as the dominance of China and the US. However, the response lacks a clear overview of the data trends. While you mention the highest and lowest countries, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, you list several figures without grouping them effectively to highlight comparisons. Additionally, there are inaccuracies in your interpretation; you state China produces 5,398 and uses 5,398, but the chart shows production and consumption as distinct bars. You also confuse the terms 'production' and 'consumption' in your description of Germany, which impacts the accuracy of your reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into a brief introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. You use some cohesive devices like 'meanwhile', 'in contrast', and 'furthermore', but they are sometimes used repetitively or in ways that do not clearly link the data points. The paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the report should ideally be split into two paragraphs to better separate the high-production countries from the lower ones. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between production and consumption figures.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, using terms like 'illustrates', 'consumption', 'production', and 'ratio'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'counts for the second position' (should be 'ranks second') and 'at last number' (should be 'at the bottom of the list'). You also use 'usage' and 'consumption' interchangeably, which is acceptable, but the phrasing 'in contradiction' is not the correct collocation for this context; 'in contrast' or 'conversely' would be more appropriate. The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'These two countries shows' (subject-verb agreement error), 'other countries as such as' (redundant phrasing), and 'Germany is the only country showing more consumption (526) than the usage (582)' (the numbers provided contradict the statement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to suggest a lack of control over more complex sentence forms.

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