Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph compares the electricity produced and consumed in ten different nations in the year of 2014. The data is calibrated in billions.

Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the largest amount of electricity consumed and produced by China. However, the lowest was accounted by Korea Rep.

To commence with, the Russia was almost stable in production and consumption of electricity during 2014. Moreover, USA represented as 4,099 and 3,866 billion KWH electricity in both production and consumption respectively. In addition, Germany, Brazil and France reported as 526.6, 530.7 and 561.2 billion KWH in production as compared to consumption were 582.5, 455.8 and 462.9 orderly.

Moving towards, the Korea Rep was only produced 485.1 billion KWH electricity and consumed 449.5 billion. Furthermore, Canada produced 618.9 billion KWH electricity and consumed 499.9 billion. Nextly, India and Japan accounted as 871 and 936.2 in production and 698.8 and 856.7 in consumption. Additionally, China used 5,322 billion KWH electricity and produced similar almost 5,398 billion in the year of 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the extremes, such as China's dominance and Korea Rep's lower figures. However, the report is somewhat mechanical, listing data points rather than synthesizing the information into a more analytical summary. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping countries by trends (e.g., those with higher production than consumption versus those with the reverse) rather than listing them individually, which would provide a more insightful overview of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with clear paragraphing. You use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly forced or unnatural, such as 'Moving towards' and 'Nextly', which is not standard English. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the reliance on simple listing structures makes the flow feel a bit repetitive. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring they are used naturally would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'calibrated', 'accounted for', and 'production and consumption'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'represented as 4,099' and 'produced similar almost 5,398'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your report. To improve, focus on using more precise verbs and ensuring that numerical data is introduced with grammatically correct phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'the largest amount of electricity consumed and produced by China' (missing verb), 'the Russia was' (unnecessary article), and 'as compared to consumption were 582.5' (awkward structure). While these errors rarely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve your accuracy.

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