Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity over the year 2014.
Overall, it is clear that the china is accounted for the largest city of electricity producer and consumer throughout the period. By contrast, the Korea recorded the lowest figure.
Looking first at the most significant figures, China dominated both production and consuption recorded considerably figures approximately 5,398 and 5,322 than the remaining countries. The United States also recorded relatively higher figures, with production consistently exceeding consumption approximately 4,099 and 3,866 throughout the period. In terms of both production and consuption, Japan stood at 936.2 and 856.7, followed by India at 871,and Canada at 618.9 to 499.9.
Turning to the remaining countries, the Republic of Korea accounted for the smallest proportion shows 485.1 and 449.5. Meanwhile, Barazil and France followed recorded marginally higher approximately 530.7 and 56.62 than the Republic of korea in terms of both production and consuption of electricity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, identifying the top producers and consumers and making relevant comparisons. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you describe China as the 'largest city', which is a factual error, and the statement that Brazil and France recorded '56.62' is confusing and likely inaccurate based on the chart. While you attempt to highlight the key trends, the lack of precision in reporting the figures and the misinterpretation of the data categories (e.g., calling a country a 'city') prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure that you accurately transcribe data points and use precise terminology when describing countries.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. There is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'By contrast', 'Looking first at', and 'Turning to'. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, the sentence 'the Republic of Korea accounted for the smallest proportion shows 485.1' is grammatically disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel slightly forced. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next will help improve the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrated', 'dominated', 'exceeding', and 'proportion'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and spelling mistakes that detract from the quality of the response. Examples include 'consuption' (spelling), 'the china is accounted for' (incorrect article and verb usage), and 'recorded considerably figures' (incorrect collocation). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, the frequent errors in word formation and collocation limit the score. Focus on learning the correct spelling of key terms and practicing common collocations related to data description.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('the china', 'the Korea'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the Republic of Korea accounted... shows'), and awkward sentence construction ('recorded considerably figures approximately 5,398'). While you attempt to use complex structures, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Prioritize proofreading your work to catch subject-verb agreement errors and ensure that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.
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