Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates the ten countries with the highest rate of production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, China and United States were the table toppers in 2014, whereas Korea and Germany were stood at the lowest. The noticeable point is that the top 2 countries had a small difference, Although other countries had a huge difference from these two countries.

First of all, China were on the top with 5398 billion kWh of electricity production and 5322 billion kWh of consumption which is followed by United States with a total of 4099 billion kWh of production and 3866 billion kWh of consumption in 2014. Meanwhile, Russia and Japan were stood at 3 and 4 with a tiny difference and India produced a total of 871 billion kWh and consumed 698.6 billion kWh.

Canada, France, Brazil and Germany also had a little difference of production and consumption of electricity. Korea were ranked at the lowest which produced 485.1 billion kWh and consumed a total of 449.5 billion kWh of electricity in 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the top two countries, the comparison between the others is vague, using phrases like 'a little difference' rather than highlighting specific data points or trends. To achieve a higher band, you should provide more precise comparisons between the countries, such as noting that China's production significantly exceeds that of the other nations. The overview is present but could be more analytical regarding the relationship between production and consumption across the ten countries.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'First of all', and 'Meanwhile', which help the flow. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'the top 2 countries had a small difference', which is ambiguous. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group information, but the progression of ideas within the body paragraphs could be smoother to ensure a more cohesive report of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'production', 'consumption', and 'ranked'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'table toppers' (too informal for an academic report) and 'were stood at' (incorrect passive construction). To improve, aim for more precise academic vocabulary to describe data, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'marginal difference'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, but it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and passive voice, such as 'China were on the top', 'Korea and Germany were stood at', and 'Korea were ranked'. These errors are frequent but do not impede overall communication. To improve, focus on consistent subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice in data reporting. While you attempt complex sentences, the accuracy is inconsistent, which limits the score in this criterion.

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