Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates manufacturing and usage of electricity in ten different countries in 2014. With figures given in billion kWh.

Overall, the production of China, United State of America were the largest manufacturer and consumers of electricity. In other eight countries the production and consumption were almost similar. In contrast, Germany was the only country whose consumption was higher than production.

In 2014, China was the largest producer and consumer of electricity among top 10 countries in 2014. It produced 5398 billion kWh and consumed 5322 billion kWh of electricity, which was quite similar. The United State of America was the second largest in number, the net excessive production is 233 billion kWh. The other eight countries consumptions were far less than China and United State of America.

However, the production and consumption of Russia and Republic of Korea is almost identical. In contrast, Germany was the only country whose usage was higher then it’s consumption.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying China and the USA as the leaders. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the top two countries, the remaining eight are grouped together without sufficient detail or specific data points to support the comparison. The statement 'In other eight countries the production and consumption were almost similar' is a broad generalization that lacks the necessary supporting evidence from the chart. Furthermore, there is a factual error in the final sentence where you state Germany's usage was higher than its 'consumption' (which is the same thing), likely intending to say production. To improve, ensure you select and report key data points for more countries to provide a more comprehensive summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'However' to signal shifts in the narrative. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the net excessive production is 233 billion kWh', which lacks a clear connection to the previous sentence. Additionally, the final paragraph repeats information already mentioned in the introduction and body, which disrupts the logical progression of the report. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph introduces new, distinct information would enhance the coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main points. You use terms like 'manufacturing', 'consumption', and 'identical' correctly. However, there are some inaccuracies and repetitive phrasing. For example, 'manufacturing' is not the most precise term for electricity; 'generation' or 'production' is standard. You also use 'excessive' incorrectly in the context of 'net excessive production', where 'surplus' would be more appropriate. There are also minor word-choice errors, such as 'usage was higher then it’s consumption' (where 'than' is the correct comparative and 'its' is the possessive pronoun). Expanding your range of synonyms for 'production' and 'consumption' would help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist. For instance, 'United State of America' should be 'the United States of America'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'In other eight countries' (should be 'In the other eight countries') and 'the production of China, United State of America were' (should be 'the production of China and the United States of America was'). These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on articles and consistent subject-verb agreement will improve your accuracy.

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