Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the amount of electricity produced and consumed in 2014 in the ten leading countries worldwide, measured in billion kWh.

Overall china and united states were far ahead of all other nation in both production and consumption. It is also evident that the most countries produced more electricity than they consumed, with the expectation of Germany, France and Korea.

China ranked first, producing 5,398 billion kWh and consuming 5,322 billion kWh. and the United states was second, it produced 4,099 and consumed 3,866 billion kWh. But the China is on the top of the rank.Russia came third with the 1,057 billion kWh production and 1,038 billion kWh consumed.

The remaining countries had significantly lower figures. Japan and India 4th and 5th ranked with the production of 936.2 and 871 billion kWh and 856.7 , 698.8 billion kWh consumption. The gap between production and consumption were most noticeable in Canada, France, Brazil. They have almost in the same strategist. and the Korea and Germany were in the lowest ranked and has lower figures with in production and consumption.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the data, such as the dominance of China and the United States and the general trend of production exceeding consumption. You have also made relevant comparisons, such as noting the exceptions to this trend. However, the report is slightly let down by some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you mention 'the gap between production and consumption were most noticeable in Canada, France, Brazil' and claim they have 'the same strategist', which is unclear and not supported by the data. To improve, ensure that all comparisons are clearly linked to the figures provided and avoid vague or inaccurate descriptions of the data trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical or awkward phrasing, such as 'with the expectation of Germany' (should be 'exception') and 'But the China is on the top of the rank'. Cohesive devices are present but sometimes used incorrectly or repetitively. The transition between the overview and the specific data points is clear, but the internal structure of the second body paragraph is somewhat disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel a bit mechanical rather than fluid.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the data, using terms like 'production', 'consumption', 'ranked', and 'leading countries'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'same strategist' (which is likely a misuse of 'strategy' or 'trend') and 'most countries produced more electricity than they consumed'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'the most countries'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for data trends and improving your control over collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('the China', 'the United states'), subject-verb agreement ('the gap... were'), and punctuation. For example, 'China ranked first, producing 5,398 billion kWh and consuming 5,322 billion kWh. and the United states was second' contains a sentence fragment. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly regarding articles and sentence boundaries.

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