Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten nations around the world for the manufacturing and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, China and United States of America both are top ranked around the world. Republic of Korea is in a least category while, Russia is approximately similar.
In production, China and USA is highest rank in a production of electricity, which was a 5.398 kWh and 4.099 kWh, while Korea accounted for least category. Germany and Brazil is approximately similar, the production is a 526.6 kWh and 530.7 kWh. Russia, Japan and India is reporting 1.057 kWh, 936.2 kWh and 871 billions kWh.
In consumption, China and United States is follow top ranked country in a consumption electricity, the proportion of a 5.332 kWh and 3.886 kWh billions whereas, Korea dramatically increase in which is a 449.5 kWh. France and Canada is approximately similar, this is a 499.9 and 499.9 kWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, identifying the top countries and making some comparisons. However, there are significant issues with the data presentation. The student incorrectly labels the units (e.g., '5.398 kWh' instead of billions of kWh) and misinterprets the data for several countries, such as stating Korea is in the 'least category' when it is clearly listed among the top ten. The overview is somewhat vague, and the lack of precision in reporting the figures hinders the clarity of the summary. To improve, ensure that data is transcribed accurately from the chart and that units are correctly identified and applied consistently throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and separate sections for production and consumption. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as the use of 'while' and 'whereas' to connect clauses that do not always flow logically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when comparing countries. While the overall structure is present, the progression of ideas is hampered by the repetitive sentence structures and the lack of sophisticated linking words to guide the reader through the comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There is frequent repetition of basic terms like 'top ranked', 'approximately similar', and 'category'. The student struggles with collocations, such as 'manufacturing of electricity' (production is more standard) and 'in a least category'. There are also issues with the interpretation of numerical data, which affects the lexical accuracy. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more varied vocabulary to describe trends and comparisons, such as 'surpass', 'lag behind', or 'comparable figures'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, for example, 'China and USA is highest rank' and 'Germany and Brazil is approximately similar'. There are also errors with articles ('the production of electricity' vs 'a production') and prepositional usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and consistent article usage would significantly improve the quality of the writing.
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