Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart below illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar chart went from higher level to lower, such as it's started from China and then end on south Korea. Most of the countries, it means eight out of ten worked in the production of electricity. The China was the high level country that was produced 5,398. Then United States was produced 4,099. These were the two countries that were on the top of rank for the production and consumption of electricity.
On the other hand, Russia was the one of the country that it's production and consumption of electricity was all most same have a little difference. Moreover, India was produced electricity only 871. Al most nine countries were worked for the production of electricity. But only one country that was Germany, it's production of electricity was low as compared to the other countries production level. It's worked only on the consumption of electricity.
Overall, nine out of ten countries worked in production such as china and United States were top rank and only Germany worked in the consumption of electricity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features, such as the leading positions of China and the United States. However, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear, analytical overview. The description of the data is often inaccurate; for instance, the claim that 'nine out of ten countries worked in production' is not supported by the data, which shows all ten countries producing electricity. Furthermore, the statement that Germany only worked in consumption is factually incorrect based on the provided chart. The response struggles to make meaningful comparisons between production and consumption figures, relying instead on repetitive and imprecise observations. To improve, you must ensure data accuracy and provide a more insightful summary of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'The bar chart went from higher level to lower' and 'it means eight out of ten worked in the production'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the lack of sophisticated linking words hinders the flow of the report. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, unified focus will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'worked', 'high level', and 'produced'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the China was the high level country' and 'all most same have a little difference'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'a marginal difference', and work on using vocabulary that is appropriate for an academic report rather than conversational phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('was produced'), subject-verb agreement errors ('The China was', 'nine countries were worked'), and awkward phrasing ('it's production of electricity was low as compared to the other countries production level'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the misuse of articles is prevalent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures prevents the use of a wider range of complex sentences. Focusing on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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