Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart depicts that production and consumption of electricity in various countries.
By taking a general overview,it is evident that china has the maximum production whereas he rep of korea has the minimum production of the electricity
On analyzing, it is seen that china comes as the first place in production and consumption of the electricity. apart from this korea comes at the last place by 485.1 billion wltt in production .France ,brazil, germany remained similar in both production and consumption of electricity.
on the other hand , united states of america consumption of electricity was 3866 while the production of united states was at almost 4099. Russia , japan , india has the production of electricity was approximately at 1057 ,936.2 ,871 orderly
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some main features, such as China's leading position and the Republic of Korea's lower figures, the analysis is underdeveloped. You have not provided a comprehensive overview of the data, and the comparisons between countries are limited and lack detail. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the main trends, and include sufficient data points to support your observations, ensuring you meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the lack of sufficient content. While you use some cohesive devices like 'on the other hand' and 'apart from this', the transitions between sentences feel mechanical and sometimes disjointed. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall structure lacks the depth required for a higher band. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'production' and 'consumption' throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice and formatting, such as 'wltt' (likely a typo for a unit) and the inconsistent capitalization of country names like 'china' and 'korea'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data description, such as 'surpass', 'account for', or 'fluctuate', and ensure proper noun capitalization and accurate terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles (e.g., 'in first place'), incorrect sentence structure, and punctuation issues. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, as most sentences are simple or contain errors that affect clarity. For example, 'Russia , japan , india has the production of electricity was approximately at...' is grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and practice combining simple sentences into more complex, error-free structures.
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