Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart compares the production and consumption of electrical energy(in billion kWh) in China, United States, Russia, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, Korea in a year.
China lead in generating and utilizing power and, in comparison the lowest output and usage was in Korea with 485.1 (billion kWh) production and 449.5 (billion kWh) consumption.
Beginning with, United stated produced 4,099 , and consumed 3,866 .Russia generated power of 1,057, and used 1,038 and then decreased in Japan of power generation of 936.2 and usage of 856.7,declined in India to 871.1 generation and 698.8 utilization. Among the leftover countries, the electricity production is highest in Canada and lowest in Germany. The usage of power energy is topmost in Germany and least in Brazil.
There is only one country, which is Germany where the electrical consumption is more than the production of electric signals which is 526.6 generation followed by 582.5 usage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main features, such as China's leading position and the comparison between production and consumption. However, the report is somewhat disorganized and fails to clearly present the data for all ten countries mentioned in the prompt. The grouping of countries is confusing, and the description of the data is occasionally inaccurate or difficult to follow, such as the list of countries that seems to skip or misidentify data points. To improve, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to their respective countries and that the comparison is structured logically, perhaps by grouping countries by their production levels rather than listing them in a way that obscures the overall trend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic paragraphing, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. Transitions like 'Beginning with' and 'Among the leftover countries' are used mechanically and do not effectively guide the reader through the data. The referencing is often unclear, particularly when discussing the 'leftover countries' without explicitly naming them or their specific figures. The logical flow is hindered by the lack of clear, cohesive links between the sentences, making the overall structure feel fragmented. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are some awkward phrasings, such as 'electric signals' to refer to electricity and 'power energy'. While the student uses some relevant terminology like 'generating' and 'utilizing', the range is limited and repetitive. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'United stated' (likely a typo for United States) and 'leftover countries', which is not appropriate for an academic report. Expanding the range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'consumption' would help improve the lexical quality.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'China lead in generating' (subject-verb agreement), 'in comparison the lowest output' (missing preposition), and 'United stated produced' (spelling/capitalization). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing around commas and numbers. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and consistent punctuation will lead to better accuracy.
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