Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart shows the countries with most production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014 .

First of all the bar graph shows china is one of the greatest production house of electricity and similarly having the most consumption of electricity shows the economically stronger than other countries in graph and more population however on the other hand US is the only country close to china in production and consumption but US contains and advantage towards production. As they are producing more than the consumer. As US have more storage of electricity in house (233 kWh ) than china.

However other countries in bar chat are in production to satisfy their consumption on low level . Like the iconic example from graph is Russia.

Lastly the only country that is under producing is Germany. They having consumption-high kWh rather than other countries shows that they are in the phase of recession or the are in the shortage of the resource .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response identifies the main features, such as China and the US leading in production and consumption. However, the analysis is superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the claim that Germany is 'under producing' and in a 'recession' is an unsupported interpretation of the data, which only shows a comparison between production and consumption levels. The report lacks a clear overview and fails to provide a structured comparison of the ten countries, focusing too heavily on subjective speculation rather than factual reporting of the data provided in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'First of all' and 'However', which do not effectively connect the ideas. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, making the text feel disjointed. Referencing is also unclear; for example, the phrase 'the iconic example from graph is Russia' lacks a clear connection to the preceding point. The overall progression of information is not sufficiently clear to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'production house of electricity' and 'economically stronger than other countries in graph' are awkward and imprecise. There is a lack of academic tone, and the student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description. Some word choices, such as 'contains an advantage towards production', are non-standard and impede the clarity of the message. The range is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision in describing statistical information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder understanding. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('They having consumption-high kWh'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as 'Like the iconic example from graph is Russia.' While there is an attempt at complex structures, they are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before periods and commas. The control of grammar is insufficient to reach a higher band.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.