Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given illustration describes about the countries with the most amount of electricity produced and consumed in the year 2014.
To begin with, the country with the highest electricity produced and utilized was China, with a value of almost 5400 and exactly 5322 spent. This was followed by United states with almost 1k lesser net current and 2k lower in overall consumption. The next three countries were Russia, Japan and India with Russia almost with the same amount of current production and utilization. Whereas, Japan and India had a slight lesser electricity values. Furthermore, the bottom three were Brazil, Germany and Korea, Rep with current values similar around 500 billion produced and dealt overall.
Overall, it is clear from all the perspectives that the country with the highest electricity and amount utilized was China, with countries like Brazil, Germany and Korea, Rep being in the bottom of the list.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main features of the chart, such as China's leading position and the general ranking of the countries, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You mention specific figures for China but rely on vague descriptions like 'almost 1k lesser' or 'slight lesser' for other countries, which lacks the precision expected in an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, ensure you provide more specific data points for all countries mentioned and ensure the response length is sufficient to fully develop the overview and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, a body paragraph, and an overview. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. The use of cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore' is appropriate, but the transition between the body paragraph and the conclusion feels abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall flow could be improved by using more varied linking phrases to connect the comparisons between production and consumption more fluidly. The structure is functional but lacks the sophistication required for a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision needed for a higher score. You use basic terms like 'amount', 'spent', and 'dealt', which are not always the most accurate choices for describing electricity data. For instance, 'spent' is not typically used to describe electricity consumption. You also repeat words like 'current' and 'values' frequently. To improve, try to incorporate more precise terminology such as 'generated', 'consumed', 'output', and 'figures'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetitive phrasing and demonstrate a better command of academic language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'describes about' is incorrect; 'describes' should be followed directly by the object. Additionally, 'almost 1k lesser net current' is grammatically awkward and lacks clarity. There are also issues with phrasing, such as 'Russia almost with the same amount', which is missing a verb. To reach a higher band, focus on improving sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement, as well as using more accurate comparative structures.
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