Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph illustrates the information about the generation and consumption of electric power in various countries in 2014. The given data is calibrated in kWh.
To begin with, in china the production and consumption of electricity was approximately similar but there was a quite difference in the United States. Moreover, the electricity generation and usage was nearly similar in Russia and Korea. Whereas, the production was more than the utilization of power in Japan and India.
Moving further, in Germany the opposite was followed from all countries that consumption was higher than the production. While in Brazil, France and Canada the utilization was less than the generation in the year 2014.
In conclusion, it is clearly seen that the highest amount of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete, as the final sentence is cut off mid-thought. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the report lacks specific data points (numerical values) from the chart, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, you must include specific figures to support your comparisons and ensure the summary is fully developed and concluded. The current response is too brief to adequately cover the main features of the provided bar chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Moving further' are used, but they feel somewhat mechanical. Because the response is unfinished, the overall coherence is severely compromised. To reach a higher band, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas flow logically from one to the next without abrupt endings.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'production', 'consumption', and 'similar'. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated or precise vocabulary related to data interpretation, such as 'surpassed', 'marginal difference', or 'exceeded'. Additionally, there are minor errors in word choice, such as 'quite difference' instead of 'significant difference'. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of synonyms and collocations appropriate for describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The sentence structures are relatively simple, and there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'in china' should be capitalized, and 'the opposite was followed from all countries that consumption was higher' is awkward and grammatically incorrect. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits the potential for a higher score. Focus on using a variety of sentence types, including subordinate clauses, and pay closer attention to basic punctuation and capitalization rules to improve clarity and accuracy.
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