Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates what was the trend of electricity production and utilization in the leading ten countries in 2014.

Overall, the rate of electricity production was higher in 9 out of 10 countries except for Germany. China topped the list with by producing and consuming the highest kilowatt electricity, whereas Korea Republic was in the bottom.

With 5398 billon kWh of energy produced, China was ahead of its closest competitor United States by almost a margin of 1300 billon kWh. Russia and China produced almost similar kWh of electricity respectively at 1057 billon kWh and 936.2 billion kWh. Moving on, India, Canada and France were in 5th, 6th and 7th rank respectively, where India was ahead of Canada by almost 250 billon kWh and France by around 310 billion kWh. In the bottom three, Brazil was at 8th position with 530.7 billion kWh electricity production, which is more than Germany by around 4 billion kWh and Korea Republic by almost 44 billion kWh.

Regarding consumptions, China was a the top at 5,322 billion kwh, which was more than US by almost 1300 billion kWh and Russia by around 4200 billion kWh. Germany's demand for electricity was more than the supply by almost 50 billion kWh. Countries like Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil and Korea republic utilized electricity in between 856.7 to 449.5 billon kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the bar chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. You successfully highlighted China's dominance and made relevant comparisons between countries. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for instance, you stated Russia and China produced similar amounts, but the figures provided (1057 vs 936) are quite distinct. Additionally, the comparison for consumption between China and Russia is mathematically incorrect based on the chart data. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are transcribed accurately and that comparisons are logically sound. The overview is present but could be more analytical by focusing on the clear gap between the top two countries and the rest of the group.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for production and consumption. Cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'moving on', and 'regarding' are used to guide the reader through the data. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by minor errors in referencing and some mechanical phrasing. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two main themes. To improve, ensure that the transition between sentences is smoother and that the logical progression of data points does not feel like a simple list of numbers, but rather a cohesive narrative of the trends shown in the chart.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'utilization', 'competitor', and 'demand'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'billon' instead of 'billion' and 'a the top' instead of 'at the top'. These errors do not impede communication but prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure consistent spelling throughout the text. Incorporating more varied vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'marginal difference', would enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'what was the trend of' (which is slightly awkward) and 'China was a the top'. There are also minor punctuation and preposition errors. The majority of your sentences are error-free, which allows for clear communication. To achieve a higher score, aim for greater control over complex structures and ensure that subject-verb agreement and article usage are consistently accurate. Proofreading for small slips in tense and word order will also help improve your overall accuracy.

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