Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the chart itself shows that the country China is Not in the competition with any other country rather than USA which is the only country Holding up on the production and electricity consumption. As while USA has a Score of 4099 at production and 3866 at electricity consumption , China has a far more score surpassing USA with a score of 5398 in production and 5322 in electricity consumpton . And with the look of the lower side of the bar chart we come to know about the Third position is taken up by russia and then Japan , India , canada , France , Brazil , Germany , Korea , with 4 ,5 ,6,7,8,9,10 Respectively .
when we talk about Why China is Dominating in the field because it is the production dominator of the world from very past and with time is growing as fast as it can and we literally can see the effects of it in india . As almost every single peice of toy available in the market of India is Made in china , every toy I've in in my life was made in China . I've never seen made in India or made in USA . Whereas isaw assembled in California on smartphones .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of providing an objective summary of the data, the student includes irrelevant personal anecdotes about toys and smartphones, which are not present in the chart. While the main features (China and USA) are identified, the description of the remaining countries is merely a list without meaningful comparison or analysis. The task requires a formal, analytical report, but the inclusion of subjective opinions and external information significantly detracts from the task achievement. The response lacks a clear overview of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The transition between the data description and the personal commentary is abrupt and confusing. Paragraphing is used, but the content within the paragraphs is not well-organized. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward phrasing 'And with the look of the lower side of the bar chart'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message. The response lacks a clear introduction and a cohesive summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Phrases like 'in the competition with', 'holding up on', and 'from very past' are unnatural and imprecise. There is a reliance on informal language and repetitive structures. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical data, opting instead for conversational fillers. To improve, the student needs to focus on academic collocations and more sophisticated vocabulary related to data interpretation, such as 'surpass', 'account for', or 'significant disparity'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'In the chart itself shows that...', which is a redundant and incorrect construction. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and spaces. The use of capitalization is erratic (e.g., 'Not', 'Holding', 'Respectively'). The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent throughout the text.
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