Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates usage and manufacturing of the electricity of the peak nations in 2014.

Overall, the bar chat is a brief research overview of the electricity consumption and manufacturing of the peak countries in 2014. This chart shows that the electricity consumption is less than production in most of the countries except Germany where manufacturing quantity is low and the usage is high.

The data that is provided of the research progress of the electricity creation and depletion in 2014, gives us a exact value of the usage of energy in different countries like China, USA, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea where all the values of production and consumption are same despite the one nation Germany where numbers are not matching with the real creation value that is 526.6 and depletion value is 582.5. This is the main information that I get in this bar graph.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately report the main features of the data. While it identifies the top ten countries, it lacks a systematic comparison of the production and consumption figures. The analysis is superficial, focusing on a general observation rather than highlighting key trends or significant differences between the nations. The statement that 'all the values of production and consumption are same' is factually incorrect based on the provided chart, which shows clear discrepancies for most countries, not just Germany. The response lacks a clear overview of the data trends, failing to meet the requirements for a high-level summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The introduction and overview are repetitive, essentially stating the same information twice. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as the phrase 'despite the one nation Germany'. The referencing is often unclear, and the transition between the general overview and the specific data points is abrupt. The lack of logical flow makes the response difficult to follow, as the writer struggles to connect the data points to the broader trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. The writer uses terms like 'manufacturing' and 'depletion' incorrectly in the context of electricity, where 'production' and 'consumption' are the standard terms. There is significant repetition of words like 'electricity', 'consumption', and 'production'. The phrasing 'exact value of the usage' and 'real creation value' is awkward and lacks the academic tone required for Task 1. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision, leading to a repetitive and somewhat unnatural tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are some attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'The data that is provided of the research progress... gives us a exact value'. There are frequent errors in article usage, preposition choice, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the bar chat is', 'all the values... are same'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is inconsistent, which occasionally impedes the clarity of the information being presented.

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