Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart compares the top ten countries in terms of electricity generation and consumption in 2014.

Overall, China ranked first in electricity generation and consumption. Production of electricity was higher than consumption in 9 countries except in the case of Germany, where consumption was greater than production.

China led in respect of production as well as in consumption with 5398 billion kWh and 5322 billion kWh, respectively. The United states stood at second spot but lag with 1300 billion kWh from first one. Russia was in third spot with 1057 billion kWh of generation, compared to Japan with 936 billion kWh of production. India was in fifth spot with 871 billion kWh of generation and 698.8 billion kWh in consumption.

Additionally, the figures for Canada and France were around 618 billion kWh and 516 billion kWh, respectively, to sustain 6th and 7th positions. The figures for Brazil and Korea in terms of generation were around 503 and 485 billion kWh, respectively. Exceptional case in Germany where consumption was higher than production, as generation was 526 billion kWh and consumption was 582.2 kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart, including the leading position of China and the notable exception of Germany. You provided relevant data points to support your descriptions. However, the response could be improved by grouping the data more effectively to facilitate comparisons. For instance, rather than listing countries individually, you could have grouped them by their production levels or highlighted the gap between the top producer and the others more explicitly. The overview is clear, but the analysis of the data could be more analytical rather than just reporting figures sequentially. Overall, you have covered all parts of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'additionally' and 'in terms of' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the progression within the third paragraph could be smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, though the connection between the sentences in the final paragraph could be improved to better highlight the contrast between Germany and the other nations. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed data analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'generation', 'consumption', and 'sustain'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'lag with 1300 billion kWh from first one', which is slightly awkward phrasing. Additionally, 'exceptional case in Germany' is a bit informal. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and a wider variety of verbs to describe trends and comparisons, moving beyond simple 'was' or 'ranked' structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'The United states stood at second spot but lag with 1300 billion kWh', where the verb tense is inconsistent ('stood' vs 'lag'). Another error is 'Exceptional case in Germany where consumption was higher', which lacks a subject and verb. While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede the reader's understanding of the data. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences would help improve this score.

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