Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart shows top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014 .

Here, there are 10 countries in this there are 2 types of consumption production (billion kWh) consumption (billion kWh).

Overall, China and United States were by far the largest producers and consumers of electricity.

China ranked first in both the cases whirl Germany where electric consumption exceeded production consumption.

According to bar chart we will talk about first five countries China has production 5,389 and consumption is about 5,322. United States have production about 4,099 and consumption about 3,866. Russia this country almost same production use and consumption use . Japan has production about 936.2 and consumption is 856.7. India has uses of production is much higher than consumption 871 production and 698.8 consumption.

Another five countries Canada production has 618.9 and consumption about 499.9 . France has 561.2 production and 462.9 consumption . Brazil 530.7 production and 455.8 consumption. Germany has higher consumption582.5 than 525.6 production . Korea has higher consumption 449.5 and production about 485.1 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the data, such as identifying China and the USA as the leaders. However, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks analytical depth. While you mention the top five and the remaining five, the presentation of data is often repetitive and lacks clear comparison. For instance, you list figures for each country individually rather than grouping them to highlight trends or significant differences. To reach a higher band, you should focus on synthesizing the information—comparing production versus consumption across the countries—rather than simply listing the numbers provided in the chart. The overview is present but could be more detailed regarding the specific relationship between production and consumption.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are often missing or mechanical, such as 'According to bar chart we will talk about...'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the structure within paragraphs feels like a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. To improve, use linking words like 'conversely', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect ideas. The paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs needs to be more fluid to guide the reader through the comparison of the data effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words 'production' and 'consumption'. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'in both the cases whirl' (likely a typo for 'while') and 'this country almost same production use'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate precision. To improve, you should incorporate a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe the data, such as 'outstripped', 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'figures for'. The current lexical range is adequate for basic communication but lacks the flexibility required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('According to bar chart'), subject-verb agreement issues ('United States have'), and awkward sentence construction ('China has production 5,389 and consumption is about 5,322'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence structures limits the score. You should focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, and pay closer attention to proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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