Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

First I would like to talk about first two countries China and United States.

Comparison electricity in 2014 between China and United States. In 2014 China take 5322 to 5398 electricity bills and United States take 3866 to 4099 bill.

And now I would like to talk about Russia and Japan.

Comparison electricity bills in 2014 between Russia and Japan.Russia take 1038 to1057 bill and Japan take 856.7 to 936.2 bill.

And now I would like to talk about India and Canada.

Comparison electricity bill in 2014 between India and Canada.

India take 698.8 to 871 bill and Canada take 499.9 to 618.9 bill.

Now I would like to talk about France and Brazil.

Comparison electricity bill between France and Brazil.

France take 462.9 to 561.2 bill and Brazil take 455.8 to 530.7 bill.

Now I would like to talk about last 2 countries Germany and Korea.

Comparison electricity bills between Germany and Korea.

Germany take 582.5 to 526.6 bill and Koera take 449.5 to 485.1 bill.

The lower bill take country is Korea 499.9 and highest country is China 5322 to 5398.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by listing data for the ten countries, but it fails to provide a meaningful summary or highlight the main features. The information is presented as a repetitive list of individual country pairs rather than a comparative analysis. There is no overview of the data, and the figures are often misquoted or confusingly presented (e.g., referring to electricity production as 'bills'). The lack of synthesis and the failure to identify significant trends or clear comparisons mean the response does not fully address the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is highly repetitive and lacks logical progression. Each paragraph follows an identical, mechanical structure ('And now I would like to talk about...'), which makes the writing feel like a list rather than a cohesive report. There is no attempt to use linking words or cohesive devices to connect ideas or compare the countries effectively. The paragraphing is present but serves only to separate the list of countries rather than to group information logically. The overall structure is very basic and lacks the flow required for a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. The student consistently uses the word 'bill' to refer to electricity production and consumption, which is inaccurate and demonstrates a lack of understanding of the topic. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'surpassed,' 'accounted for,' 'fluctuated,' or 'significant.' The phrasing is simplistic and relies heavily on the same sentence patterns throughout the entire response, which severely limits the ability to convey information precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'China take', 'Germany take') and incorrect prepositional usage. The sentence construction is often awkward, and the lack of complex structures prevents the demonstration of grammatical control. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic errors and the lack of variety in sentence forms indicate a limited command of English grammar.

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