Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart describes about the top ten countries making and the consumption of the electricity in the year 2014.
Overall, the chart gives information about the ten countries such as China, Russia, United states,Japan, India,Canada,France,Brazil,Germany, Korea and in which highest is China and lowest is Korea.
The China is on the top list and its production is about 5,398 billion and consumption is 5,322 and its total rate is mostly equal. The United States is a bit low and it is about 4,099 billion in production and consumption is 3,666 billion.
The Russia and Japan is on approximately on similar level and their production and consumption is equal it is about 1000 billion.The India is on the small point and its both production and consumption is 750 billion. The Canada is on six number and its produce rate is 618 billion and consumption is 500 billion.
The France,Brazil and Germany are equal in production and in consumption and this rate is almost 500 billion. The Korea is on last number and its production is 485.6 billion and consumption is 449.5 billion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as identifying the highest and lowest producers. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention specific figures, the comparison between countries is limited, and the grouping of countries (e.g., France, Brazil, and Germany) is slightly inaccurate based on the provided data. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping data more logically and highlighting significant trends or contrasts rather than listing figures for each country individually. The overview is present but could be more analytical by focusing on the gap between production and consumption across the top ten.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive (e.g., starting multiple sentences with 'The'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. For example, using transition signals like 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Conversely' would improve the flow. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as 'The Russia and Japan is on approximately on similar level,' which lacks smooth integration into the paragraph structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use 'production' and 'consumption' alongside 'rate' and 'level,' which is acceptable but lacks variety. There are also some awkward phrasing choices, such as 'on the small point' and 'on six number,' which are not natural English collocations. To improve, try to incorporate more varied verbs and nouns to describe data, such as 'surpass,' 'account for,' 'figure,' or 'proportion,' and ensure that your word choices are precise rather than relying on simple descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'The China' vs 'China'), subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'The Russia and Japan is'), and incorrect preposition usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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